je sais que sa va vous paraitre etr

je sais que sa va vous paraitre etrange mais je suis en 4eme et
ma proff me demande d'ecrire une expression ecrite pour jeudi en evoquant un souvenir heureux qui m'a procuréé du bonheur.je doit indiquer les circonstances ainsi que les sentiments,les emotions eprouvés.
mon recit doit:
* comporter des paragrephe clairement delimiter
* etre redigé a la 1ere persone
* utiliser les temps du recit (imparfait et/ou passé simple)
* les circonstances-les sentiments clairement exprimés
* orthographe-conjugaison et construction des phrases soignées
* recit correctement présenté et ecriture soignés
j'avais prevu de raconter mon anniversaire
et j'ai commencer par...
J'etais tranquillement dans ma chambre a faire mes devoirs dans un silence absolu,puis quand j'eu tout finis, je descendis dans la salle a manger et allumais la lumiere, soudain tous mes amis et ma famille surgirent et criaient "joyeu anniversaire",j'eu très peur si bien que
mes jambes tremblaient et que mon coeur battait très vite mais je fus aussi heureuse.
Il y avait des tas de ballons multicolors partout accrochés ainsi que plein des friandise et de gateaux etalés sur le buffet tous cela me fesait chaud au coeur,mes yeux etait remplis de larmes de bonheur,j'etais très amus de cet anniversaire inatendu.Ce fut le plus beau jour de ma vie qui restera a jamais gravé dans mon coeur.
ne faites pas attention au fautes d'orthographe =$
dans mon texte je sens qu'il manque quelque chose il n'est pas complet,trop court peut-etre je n'est plus d'inspiration donc j'aimerais que vous me dites ce que vous en pensé merci pour le coup de main smile

결과 (영어) 1:

I know that its going to you seem strange but I am in 4th and My proff asks me to write an expression written for Thursday in mentioning a happy memory that got the bonheur.je procuree shall identify the circumstances as well as the feelings, the emotions tested.my account is:* include the paragrephe clearly delimiter* be prepared to the 1st persone* use the time of the story (imperfect or past simple)* the circumstances - the clearly expressed feelingsspelling-conjugation and construction of neat phrases* correctly this story and write caredI had planned to tell my birthdayand I start by...I was quietly in my room doing my homework in absolute silence, and then when I had everything finished, I walked down in the dining room and turned the light, suddenly all my friends and my family arose and shouted "Merry birthday", I was very scared if althoughmy legs were shaking and that my heart was beating very fast but I was also happy.There were heaps of balls multicolors everywhere hung as well as full of candy and cake stalls on the buffet all this me hot fesait in the heart, my eyes were filled with tears of happiness, I was very amus of this anniversary collection. It was the happiest day of my life that will remain ever carved in my heart.do not pay attention to the spelling mistakes = $ I feel that there is something missing in my text it is not complete, too short maybe I is more inspiration so I would like you to tell me what you thought thanks for the helping hand smile

결과 (영어) 2:

I know its going to seem strange to you but I'm in 4th and
my proff asks me to write a speech written for Thursday in evoking a happy memory that afforded me the bonheur.je must state the circumstances and feelings, . Emotions experienced
my narrative must:
* contain paragrephe clearly delimiter
* be written in the first persone
* use time of the narrative (imperfect and / or past simple)
* circumstances-the clearly expressed feelings
* spelling, conjugation and sentence construction Neat
* narrative writing correctly presented and cared
I had planned to tell my birthday
and I start ...
I Needed quietly in my room doing my homework in complete silence, and then when I had finished everything, I went down to the dining room and turned on the light, suddenly all my friends and family arose and shouted "joyeu anniversary", I was very scared so
my legs were shaking and my heart was beating very fast but I was so happy.
There were lots of multicolored balloons hung everywhere and full of candy and cakes spread on the buffet this fesait warm my heart, my mind was filled with tears of happiness, I was very amused of this anniversary inatendu.Ce was the happiest day of my life that will remain forever etched in my heart.
do not pay attention to misspellings = $
in my text I feel that something is missing is not complete, perhaps too short I no longer be an inspiration so I would like you to tell me what you think thank you for the helping hand smile

결과 (영어) 3:

i know it sounds strange, but i am in the fourth and asked me to write a proff material, referring to "a happy memory for me bonheur.je procuréé shall specify the circumstances and feelings, emotions eprouvés. my recit must: * be clear,% (he was the first to be drafted.use the time of the recit imperfect and / or past simple) circumstances, the sentiments articulated
spelling, conjugation and sentence construction, and properly treated (* recit writing treated and presented i had planned to tell my birthday, and i start, i was sitting in my room do homework in a quiet.and then, when i had finished, i came down in the dining room and turned on the light, all of a sudden, all of my friends and my family arrived and shouted "thank birthday, i was very scared, so that my legs trembled and my heart beat very fast, but i was so happy.there were balloons. multicolors everywhere and full of candy and cookies on the buffet every etalés it was heartwarming, my eyes were filled with tears of joy, i was really having some anniversary unexpected. it was the happiest day of my life, forever engraved in my heart, do not pay attention to spelling = $.in my text i feel that something is missing it is not full, too short, maybe i is not inspiration, so i'd like you to tell me what you think, thank you for the help smile.